The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors-agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial services-to the UK economy in the twentieth cenutury. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors-agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial services-to the UK economy in the twentieth cenutury. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The following graph depicts three main fields that influenced the
economy
of the UK in the twentieth century in percentages. Those fields include
agriculture
, manufacturing,
business
and
finance
.
Overall
, in the first half of the 20th ,century
agriculture
played a huge role in the
economy
of the UK, unlike the second half because
business
and
finance
became more important during that period of time. We can observe a downward trend in
agriculture
and manufacturing
,
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and an upward trend in the influence of
business
and financial
sectors
.
Agriculture
made up almost 50%, manufacturing around 45%, and the
contribution
of
finance
and
business
was less than 10% of the
economy
of the UK, in 1900. From 1950 until 1975, the impact of each of these
sectors
except for manufacturing increased. Manufacturing made up less than 40% of the
economy
.
However
, the
contribution
of
agriculture
made up more than 60%, and
finance
and
business
made up almost 10% of the
economy
. In 1975, the influence of both
agriculture
and manufacturing decreased, they made up almost 10% and more than 30%, respectively. The
contribution
of the
business
and financial
sectors
kept increasing, they made up approximately 20 of the
economy
.
Lastly
in 2000, the impact of
agriculture
and manufacturing continued decreasing, they made up less than 10% and around 15%, respectively. But the
contribution
of the
business
and financial
sectors
increased dramatically, it made up around 40% of the
economy
.
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