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In some countries defence expenditure is an important component of national security. Every country should allocate a significant portion of its resources for this purpose. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are many crucial components to national security, but in some
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 defence expenditure is the most important area to be supplied by their resources
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 some
countries
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 distribute it to other areas supporting national security. I must agree
to
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 the statement,
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 largest proportion of payments needs to be for defence
expenditure
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.
Firstly
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, it is undeniable that globally, the strongest armed
countries
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, namely China and
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 States possess the most armed
forces
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 and strongest weapons.
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, these
countries
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 are respected by many
countries
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 in the world because of their power and economic presence.
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, it is very clear that allocating a country's resources for armed
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 will be beneficial for growing
countries
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 and will portray a great position in the military aspect.
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it is clear that
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 a number of
countries
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 have sided with either China or
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 States because of how dominant those
countries
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 have become
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 their military power.
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, the massive growth in a country’s technology for weapons and
forces
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 will reflect the country’s financial resources. Leading
countries
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 will acquire the newest cutting-edge weapons to secure the country,
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 other
countries
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 will need to put
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 effort
in
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 owning the best supply for their
forces
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.
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, they are going to be internationally independent and will not need to depend on other
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, defence expenditure needs to be prioritized in any country to bring security
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 the citizens. Even though it must allocate a big financial expense, it will be beneficial for the future when a war happens.
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