The best way to solve traffic and transportation problems is to encourage people to live in cities rather than suburbs or countryside. What extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no denying the fact that
traffic
and transportation issues are a big concern for many people
. while
is a commonly held belief that governments ought to tell people
to move to cities
rather than rural areas or countryside, there is also
an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that we must tell people
to not moving to cities
but instead
of that they should go out of the cities
.
To begin
with, we all know that if the proportion of the city's population could cause more traffic
problems. In other words
, people
should move to other areas. In addition
, according to
research that I read on a website: most cities
that have significant transportation problems are those that have more people
living in it
. Correct pronoun usage
them
For example
, my city has the highest rate of traffic
issues among all cities
in my country just because the proportion of the population is more than in Jedda for example
.
another point to consider,
is that the Remove the comma
apply
people
who live in a city have the ability to go out anytime they want. It is also
possible to say that they will hang out with their friends without planning. Moreover
, it will be easier to transport and you will arrive fast this
idea will make people
drive more and cause more traffic
. For instance
, if I want to shopping and go to a mall I do not have to make a schedule for it.
in conclusion, despite people
having different views. I believe that the governments must encourage people
to think about moving to the suburbs or the countryside.Submitted by firasalfadda2 on
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The introduction lacks clarity and fails to present a clear stance on the topic. The body paragraphs contain relevant points but need further development. The conclusion should summarize the argument and restate the stance.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure is somewhat evident, but the essay lacks coherence in connecting ideas and maintaining a clear progression of thoughts. Transition words and phrases should be used to better link the sentences and paragraphs together.