Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Across the globe, it is seen that developed countries give financial aid to
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are in
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crisis.
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, the issue of
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and hunger remain
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there and they couldn't become independent
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their own. There can be many reasons for their financial issues like illiteracy, corruption, political crises, wars, etc. These issues need proper policies,
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, monitoring and nurturing education to resolve.
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country
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face
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crisis
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like these can not get rid of
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by receiving financial support from
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world. In my opinion, developed
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financial aid play their role to help
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in developing proper law and education systems. It can be done by providing financial experts to them in making
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democratic system,
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education system,
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to monitor corruption.
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launching educational programs which help the
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to have their own educational experts who can bring valuable insights to counter illiteracy problems. Engineers will help
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country
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to prosper in infrastructure and technology. Doctors will play their part in
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system. Financial
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will provide valuable insights to utilize money efficiently.
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change in the
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which might be
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process but will be more helpful in eliminating
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cause of
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. I strongly agree that developed countries should share technological and educational expertise
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financial aid to help poorer
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utilise
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main
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reasons of
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, and not on
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level by just distributing food and other things among people to survive.
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kind of support will bring developing
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path of growth and development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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