The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The given bar charts depict the number of graduate and postgraduate
students
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in the
UK
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who did so after graduation in 2008.
In addition
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, the data excludes
students
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who did full-time jobs.
Overall
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,
further
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study has become the most important destination for
UK
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graduates and postgraduates after finishing their studies,
while
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voluntary
work
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was the least.
According to
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the
UK
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graduates, the biggest contributor to destination after graduating was a
further
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study at 29,665
students
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.
Then
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, it was followed by Part-time
work
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and Unemployment at 17,735
students
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and 16,235
students
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, respectively.
Lastly
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, voluntary
work
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constituted only 3,500
students
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. Moving onto the
UK
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postgraduates’ data. It can clearly be seen that it has the same trend as the
UK
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graduate
students
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who continue their studies stood in first place at 2,725
students
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. Postgraduates who did part-time
work
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made up 2,535
students
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at the second place. Unemployed postgraduate
students
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made up 1,625
students
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.
Additionally
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, voluntary
work
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became the least option for postgraduates at 345
students
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, uk, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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