The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
The given bar charts depict the number of graduate and postgraduate
students
in the UK
who did so after graduation in 2008. In addition
, the data excludes students
who did full-time jobs.
Overall
, further
study has become the most important destination for UK
graduates and postgraduates after finishing their studies, while
voluntary work
was the least.
According to
the UK
graduates, the biggest contributor to destination after graduating was a further
study at 29,665 students
. Then
, it was followed by Part-time work
and Unemployment at 17,735 students
and 16,235 students
, respectively. Lastly
, voluntary work
constituted only 3,500 students
.
Moving onto the UK
postgraduates’ data. It can clearly be seen that it has the same trend as the UK
graduate students
who continue their studies stood in first place at 2,725 students
. Postgraduates who did part-time work
made up 2,535 students
at the second place. Unemployed postgraduate students
made up 1,625 students
. Additionally
, voluntary work
became the least option for postgraduates at 345 students
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