The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
The given bar charts depict the number of graduate and postgraduate
students
in the
UK
who did so after graduation in 2008.
In addition
, the data excludes
students
who did full-time jobs.
Overall
,
further
study has become the most important destination for
UK
graduates and postgraduates after finishing their studies,
while
voluntary
work
was the least.
According to
the
UK
graduates, the biggest contributor to destination after graduating was a
further
study at 29,665
students
.
Then
, it was followed by Part-time
work
and Unemployment at 17,735
students
and 16,235
students
, respectively.
Lastly
, voluntary
work
constituted only 3,500
students
. Moving onto the
UK
postgraduates’ data. It can clearly be seen that it has the same trend as the
UK
graduate
students
who continue their studies stood in first place at 2,725
students
. Postgraduates who did part-time
work
made up 2,535
students
at the second place. Unemployed postgraduate
students
made up 1,625
students
.
Additionally
, voluntary
work
became the least option for postgraduates at 345
students
.
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  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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