The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the newest and the oldest
of
shops in one country from 2011 to 2018. Change preposition
apply
Overall
, the number of the newest shops experienced decreased whereas
the oldest of shops remained levelled-off throughout the year
.
In 2011, the comparison between opening a store
and closing remained a higher gap. Opening started at 8.000
stores Correct your spelling
8,000
then
just dropped to 4.000 in the next year
. From 2012 to 2014, a
new Correct article usage
the
store
gradually increased at
6.000. Change preposition
to
Nevertheless
, the number of stores decreased at
4.000 between 2015 and 2017 Change preposition
to
then
dropped to 3.000 by the end of year
,
Add an article
the year
On the other hand
, the figure of
closed Change preposition
for
shop
was dramatically drastic Fix the agreement mistake
shops
throughtout
the Correct your spelling
throughout
year
. It started at 6.500 stores in 2011. Closing
shop experienced rose to the peak of a number Add an article
The closing
Change preposition
of store
store
Fix the agreement mistake
stores
then
just felled
below 1.000 in 2015. Wrong verb form
fell
However
, in the next year
, closing
Correct article usage
the closing
store
increase rocketed to 5.000 store
Change to a plural noun
stores
then
stable until the end of year
.Add an article
the year
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, store with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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