The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the newest and the oldest
of
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shops in one country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, the number of the newest shops experienced decreased
whereas
the oldest of shops remained levelled-off throughout the
year
. In 2011, the comparison between opening a
store
and closing remained a higher gap. Opening started at
8.000
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8,000
stores
then
just dropped to 4.000 in the next
year
. From 2012 to 2014,
a
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new
store
gradually increased
at
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6.000.
Nevertheless
, the number of stores decreased
at
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4.000 between 2015 and 2017
then
dropped to 3.000 by the end of
year
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the year
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,
On the other hand
, the figure
of
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closed
shop
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shops
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was dramatically drastic
throughtout
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throughout
the
year
. It started at 6.500 stores in 2011.
Closing
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shop experienced rose to the peak of a number
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of store
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store
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stores
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then
just
felled
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below 1.000 in 2015.
However
, in the next
year
,
closing
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the closing
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store
increase rocketed to 5.000
store
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stores
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then
stable until the end of
year
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the year
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, store with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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