The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

One of the most crucial aspects of scientific research is increasing human
life
.
Although
there is some truth that the reason for studying
science
is to improve our
life
,
that is
not true that it is the only aim for investigating
science
. First of all,
science
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aim should be
improving
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to improve
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people’s
life
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for several reasons. One of them is to
increasing
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human
life
expectancy, the longer we live, the happier we are. Humans for a long time
ago
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has developed medical to
lingered
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life
’s long , treated diseases and illness to become stronger and healthier. After
thousand
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years, human has created
science
in order to investigate more about how our
life
can be improved.
Moreover
, developing technology
also
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crucial
with
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human
life
. Nowadays, many AI robots can help people with their stuff
such
as doing housework,
therefore
,
make
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our
life become
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lives
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more comfortable and easier.
The
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science
plays an important role to continue
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these bots.
For instance
, research indicates that 60% of scientists are evolving day by day to help humanity more
simple
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.
On the other hand
, improving people’s lives should not be the only reason. One aspect scientists must consider is preserving our planet.
Due to
increasing
in
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industrialization and improvement in technology, the Earth
are
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heavily damaged by humans, especially
scientists
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since scientists
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destroyed
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the environment for their testing.
Thus
, technologists must come up with ideas to protect our
planets
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, not only a place for
only
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human lives, it
also
habitat
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the habitat
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of
billion
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billions
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animals
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of animals
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.
A
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environmentalist said that with
this
industrialise
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pace, we are going to
destroyed
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our home in nearly a century.
Furthermore
,
science
must help
human
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humans
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to know more about the
natural
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around
ous
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us
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. We have less knowledge about the range of deep oceans or high mountains, so that, scientific methods should be applied to
rise
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raise
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our
intellectual
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. In conclusion,
science
are
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so important
with
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human.
Nevertheless
, rather than only
focus
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focusing
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on
increasing
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our lives, it should
also
focus on our planet , or even outside the universe to make people become smarter.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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