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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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The provided graph
respresents
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represents
 the cost of
Copper
, Nickel, and Zinc in one
month
 in the year 2014.
Overall
, the fluctuation of the price of the metals are downfall.
Difference
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The difference
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of
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in
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 the figure of
Copper
 was slightly uptrend.
However
, for Nickel and Zinc
graph
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graphs
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 are
steep
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a steep
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 drop down and after that rate rose very minimal.
In addition
 three of the metal's prices were downward to the
month
 of
J
.
Firstly
, from the previous
month
Copper
 rate
stared
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started
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with
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at
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 2%.
Then
 it declined to its lowest point
at
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in
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month
J
.
Secondly
, Nickel's price change percentage was 1% but the changes inclined to 3% and
then
 fell into
it's
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its
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 lowest point, which was the
month
J
.
However
, again it rose and
hitted
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hit
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 the point
1.5
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of 1.5
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%
changes
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change
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 which was
near
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apply
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close to
Copper
.
Finally
, Zinc changes from
last
month
 by 6% which was the highest among
other
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the other
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 two metals. It was
also
 steep drop down to its lowest level in the
month
 of
J
 like
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the others
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others
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other
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 two metals. After
that
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,that
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 the trend was upward and finished with
the
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a
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 1% change.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, month, j with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "steep" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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