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Some believe that a student’s success is mainly based on the quality of their teaching while others think it has more to do with the student’s attitude. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#believe #student’s #success #quality #attitude
Education is an essential part of one's life.
However
, the purpose served in educational institutions is often much debated. Many believe that the better the teaching style and resources, the better the learning is.
Whereas
, some people argue that
success
 has a lot more to do with
student's
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attitude
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. I personally think that a child is more responsible for his
success
. With modernization. the education system has
also
 become advanced. Institutions are supposed to incorporate
this
tehnological
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technological
advancementtechnological
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advancement technological
 advancement into their curriculum so that
students
 can be benefited more.
For instance
, interactive sessions between
students
 and teachers make the
students
 more confident and allow them to enhance their skills
such
 as listening and speaking.
Moreover
,
practical
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 teaching style would encourage
students
 to learn and understand lessons in the long run. Bad teaching quality,
on the other hand
, can influence the student's confidence and
success
.
For example
, it has been seen that teachers in most
of
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the
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universities have strong dependencies on PowerPoint medium
therefore
 causing a lack of interest in
students
 for a particular topic.
In contrast
, stories have been heard of
students
'
success
 regardless of what institution they have taught in. There is a famous saying: that you can open doors for someone, but to pass through those doors is on their own will.
This
 argument can be supported by the fact that Malala Yousufzai used to get her education from a small school with a lack of technologies and other different resources,
still
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 she is known as a successful person around the globe.
To conclude
, I agree with the second statement, if a student is not interested in becoming a successful person. no force
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 earth can make him do so.
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