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Some people believe that it is essential to include Physical Education classes in the curriculum for all school-age children. Others think that children's time is better spent on more academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #education #classes #curriculum #children #time #subjects
Students
 attend
school
 to improve their vision and enhance their skills.
For
this
 reason, some people feel that it is necessary to include physical
education
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 better
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this
 goal. Others think that they should focus all their energy on their academic subjects.
Student
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 are get admitted to
school
 to learn things as much as possible. Unfortunately, we have put learning into artificial boxes suggesting that physical and academic
education
 are not connected. There is a famous saying: "
not
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 all
the
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students
 are
same
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". Some people shine in academics,
while
 other people in the world are known for their
sportmanship
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sportsmanship
 skills,
for instance
, Ronaldo may not have passed
school
 but is considered as
successful
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 person as any Chartered Accountant in the world. Physical
education
, provided in the
school
 allows
sports oriented
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students
 to polish their capabilities and develop their interest in that field even more.
Moreover
,
sudents
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students
 often get tired of studying all day and require something to freshen up themselves. Physical activities
helps
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 them to restore their energy to concentrate on their subjects with focused minds. Despite
this
, the amount is
time
 specified for each activity is important. The more we learn about a
subject
, the more complex it gets. The depth of the
subject
 requires more
time
 and concentration. If
students
 spend more
time
 on physical
education
, their focus
gets
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 doomed.
Further
, there is
a
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one
particuar
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particular
subject
students
 find interesting to build their career in.
This
 requires
time
 to find which
subject
 is out of all. Not giving too much
time
 on that specific
subject
,
students
 may begin to lose interest, which can be harmful to their
career
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. In conclusion, from the above arguments, I am inclined to say that incorporating physical
education
 outweighs its disadvantages.
However
, caution is necessary, the amount of
time
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 be set for physical activities is essential.
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