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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
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The bar chart compares the amount of time spent by people in the UK on three different types of phone calls between 1995 and 2002.
It is clear that
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 calls made via local, fixed lines were the most popular type, in terms of
overall
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 usage, throughout the period shown. The lowest figures on the chart are for mobile calls, but
this
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 category
also
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 saw the most dramatic increase in user
minutes
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. In 1995, people in the UK used fixed lines for a total of just over 70
billion
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minutes
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 for local calls, and about half of that amount of time for national or international calls.
By contrast
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, mobile phones were only used for around 4
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minutes
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. Over the following four years, the figures for all three types of phone calls increased steadily. By 1999, the amount of time spent on local calls using landlines had reached a peak at 90
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minutes
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.
Subsequently
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, the figure for
this
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 category fell, but the rise in the other two types of phone calls continued. In 2002, the number of
minutes
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 of national/international landline calls passed 60
billion
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,
while
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 the figure for mobiles rose to around 45
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minutes
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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