The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The two charts give information about people visiting to Ashdown Museum during the
year
before and the
year
after it was refurbished. The table compares
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for the data of
visitors
, and the pie charts show the percentage of respondents in satisfaction of Ashdown Museum refurbishment between two periods.
Overall
,
it is clear that
travellers increased after respondents, from 74,000
visitors
to 92,000
visitors
. We
also
can see that the ratings of customer satisfaction surveys
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shown
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customers
more
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likely to recommend. In more detail, a majority of
visitors
in the
year
before rebuilding were
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, at around 40%. The second rate was people who
satisfied
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, at 30%.
By contrast
, in the
year
after refurbishment, there was a main rate in the
visitors
who were satisfied, around 40%. Yet, the dissatisfied travellers accounted for 15%. It is interesting to note that when Ashdown Museum finished
to redecorate
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visitors
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increasly
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increasingly
, from 15% to 35 %.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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