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It is believed that there is a negative impact of tourism on tourist spots which is majorly due to the behaviour of people who visit there. Why do you think that people behave badly when they visit some places? What measures can be taken to resolve this issue? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Due to
 the unacceptable behaviour of the
tourists
, tourism is having a bad impact on
tourists
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tourist
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places
 as per the opinion of many
people
 in
the
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society. There are various reasons for the bad behaviour of the
people
 and many solutions that can help to solve
this
 problem to prevent the
tourists
places
 from
such
 exploitation. In the upcoming
paragraphs
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 we are going to discuss both reasons and solutions for
this
 problem. Out of
varied
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 reasons for
unacceptable
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the unacceptable
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 behaviour of the
people
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,people
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one
 main reason is
that
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carelessness by the government
employees
 who are not taking care of the monuments and buildings for which they are
employeed
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employed
 and paid
off
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. They were just marking their presence and
then
evaporated
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 like air. Now when
tourists
 see the buildings are already dirty by littering garbage here and there and young boys and girls writing useless things on the walls, they
also
 do the same things. Another
one
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reason
,
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 could be that nowadays
people
 who
visits
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such
places
 are very insensitive and irresponsible
that
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in that
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 they do not have any love
with
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for
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 their country. They are not aware
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of
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about
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 the importance of these
places
. These are just
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a
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common buildings
for
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them
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which are made of up bricks and cement. The new generations did not care
abouts
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about
 the sentiments related to these
tourists
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places
. There are many measures we can take to prevent damage
of
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 our
tourists
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places
.
Firstly
, the government should have to be strict with the
employees
 and a regular
insepection
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inspection
inspections
 should be conducted and strict punishment
such
 as suspension for 1 week given to
one
 or two
employees
 so that the others will be
on line
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online
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.
Secondly
, it is the
responsibility
 of parents and teachers who have to
taught
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 a sense of
responsibility
 to maintain these precious
places
 which we visit. The children went with their teachers on
school
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a school
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trip
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 or with parents so it should be their
responsibility
 as well to take care that good values should be taught
their
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 children at that time and they should not pollute the environment of these ancient
mounuments
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monuments
 and
places
.
To conclude
,
therefore
this
 is the
responsibility
 of everyone including
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the government
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government
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the government
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, their
employees
, teachers and parents to set a good example and
taught
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 good values to the new generation and follow the same values by themselves.
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 not a
one day
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 process, it will take some time.
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