The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The given line graph shows the trend of
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population
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the population
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who are living in the cities in four different countries from 1970 to 2020 with additional information for the next 20 years.
Overall
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, the highest citizen is belonged to
Malaysia
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which rose significantly
while
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the rest fluctuated.
According to
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the picture, the figure for
Malaysia
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and the Philippines in the starting year remained the same by 30 % and kept increasing every 10 years.
However
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,
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the population
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of
Malaysia
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levelled down from almost half to 40 % in 2010 and bounced back gradually in 2020 and estimated in 2040 will be over 50%. Meanwhile, the Philippines will be about 80%.
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Population
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of city dwellers in Indonesia and Thailand in 1970 almost shared a similar number which was somewhere in the vicinity of 15 % and there was an intersection in 2000 which accounted for just about a quarter. For Indonesia specifically, the number rocketed more than Thailand and
Malaysia
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, which reached 55 % in 2020 and predicted almost 60 % in 2040.
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, Thailand bounced back gradually after witnessing a small dip in 2020 and is estimated will reach 28 % of
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the population
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in the end period of the year.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, malaysia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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