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“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it better to invest in preventative measures” To what extent do you agree

#“prevention #cure” #diseases #measures”
In today's world, humans are responsible for causing many natural disasters, and one of the most significant ones is global warming. I have seen the devastating effects of
this
 phenomenon on TV through National Geographic programs for many years now, and it shows no signs of stopping. The situation is only getting worse
day
 by
day
, with rivers getting polluted with chemical waste from factories, which not only destroys marine life but
also
 their habitat. The inability to decompose garbage quickly has resulted in fast fashion, which is not sustainable for the environment.
Additionally
, the use of many non-recyclable
plastic
 items exacerbates the issue. All of these adverse activities have a terrible impact on our environment,
such
 as melting ice caps, endangering multiple species that have become homeless, disrupting the food chain, and depleting the ozone layer. Despite all these negative consequences, we can still take action to protect our surroundings.
For example
, we can use recycled items, reduce
plastic
 waste, educate the public about environmental issues, and provide solutions
such
 as saving electricity, water, and natural resources to preserve our planet. Let's join hands and make a positive change for a better tomorrow.In
this
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modern life, people are the source of many natural disasters. One of them is global warming which I have seen numerous times on TV through the National Geography program many years ago until now and it will not stop in the future
due to
 the fact that the situation
be
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 worse
day
 by
day
.
For example
, rivers polluted with chemical waste from factories destroy marine features health
also
 their habitat, unable decomposition of garbage seems
as
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 fast fashion (a kind of fashion
which
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that
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clothes are very cheap and unlong-lasting),
besides
 that, we use
many
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plastic
 items can not be recycle,ect. All of these things
impacts
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negatively to the environment
for instance
 ice melting, multitudinous species being in danger because global warming makes them homeless and affects the food chain,
furthermore
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the ozone layers being demolished, and so on. Despite all of those negative results, we should defend our surroundings by using recycled things, decreasing
plastic
 garbage, propagating
about
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environmental problems to the public, and giving solutions
such
 as saving electricity, water, and natural resources to take care of our planet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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