12.Many young people do not spend their holidays and weekends doing outdoor activities like hiking and climbing in natural environments. Why? How can they be encouraged to go out?
It is argued that the young generations tend to spend less
time
on outdoor activities
, such
as hiking and climbing. The main reason for this
is the addiction that they have on the internet, and a possible solution could be the organization of external activities
.
Technology is the main cause why people
prefer to stay at home. This
is because they can sit down, relax and do what they like, with no need to be tired because of doing exercise . Video games allow individuals to rest and at the same time
have fun with their friends. ,Also
it is easier for young people
to decide what to do, since doing outdoor activities
they are not sure if they will like it and it might be a waste of time
. According to
recent studies, the majority of young people
have a tendency to use their free time
inside of the house playing computer games or using social media platforms.
This
situation can be improved by encouraging schools and families to organize activities
such
as camping with original games and competitions, asking more children to participate together, so the kids can make new friends and also
spend time
in nature, so after a certain time
they would prefer doing open-air activities
. For example
, schools in Spain organize different activities
such
as hiking, skiing, summer camp and final course trips, so the students can practice different activities
, enjoy the environment and know new people
.
In conclusion, young people
do not spend time
doing outdoor activities
because of are addicted to using technology. However
, parents and schools can get children involved in other hobbies by getting them used to being outside.Submitted by elenazheng1211 on
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