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The table compares how much teachers in secondary school in five different nation earned per year in 2009

The table compares how much teachers in secondary school in five different nation earned per year in 2009
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, teachers in Luxembourg received the highest income per year,
whereas
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 it took quite a long time to reach
top
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the top
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salary
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.
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, the amount of
salary
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 for secondary teachers in Denmark spent the lowest time having the maximum range of
salary
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. Luxembourg had the highest range of starting income for teaching, at 80,000 per year. After the period of 15
years
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, the amount of
salary
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 rose to 112,000 yearly, and it took them 30
years
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 to be on top of the rank, reaching 139,000 each year.
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, Australia and Denmark witnessed different patterns. The secondary teachers in
two
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the two
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 nations earn the maximum income
less
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of less
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 than 10
years
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;
nevertheless
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, both Australia and Denmark were among the lowest, at only 48,000 and 54,000 respectively.
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 the remaining figures, it took the longest period of time for Korea and Japan to have the top
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salary
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salaries
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, about 37 and 34
years
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, respectively.
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While the
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 initial expenses for teaching in
two
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the two
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 nations were at the lowest, with 30,500
for
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as
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 the average in Korea and 28,000 in Japan.

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