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Most of the world's problems are caused by overpoplulation. Do you agree or disagree?

#world #overpoplulation
It can be ostensibly seen that
population
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the population
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 has increased
continuosly
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continuously
due to
this
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these
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 issues
are creating
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being created
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 day by day .I completely agree with
this
 essay and
i
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I
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 will intend to analyze to
upcomig
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upcoming
 paragraphs. To commence with, jobs are becoming
less
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fewer
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 because of overpopulation
as a result
 educated individuals has
investigating
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investigated
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 more works.
Moreover
,
community
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communities
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 are residing close
space
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to space
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 as huge industries
had
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have
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 settled there.
For example
, In
iINDIA
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India
 people have been facing housing
prtedoblem
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problem
, electricity and water issues for five years.
In addition
, In developing
countries
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,countries
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 adults prefer flats where toddlers can not play properly .
Secondly
, it might be seen that becoming more traffic
jam
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jams
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 have
arised
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caused
 fatal
situation
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situations
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 not only for
elderly
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the elderly
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 masses but
also
preschool
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for preschool
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 children
such
 as
,
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apply
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 tuberculosis , asthma attack ,
stroke
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and stroke
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as a result
 mortality rate
has
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tohas
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boost
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boosted
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up
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apply
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continuosly
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continuously
. To
be illustrate
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illustrate
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,
scientist
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scientists
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 have
proves
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proved
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 that , in 2050 ,
population
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the population
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 will
become
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apply
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skyrocketed
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skyrocket
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 and
demand
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the demand
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of
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for
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 water could be
dimnished
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diminished
 frequently
according to
situation
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the situation
a situation
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. To recapitulate , I completely agree
with
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apply
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that
growing
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a growing
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 population can cause
hazards
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hazardous
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situation
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situations
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 if it
will
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is
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 not
be
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apply
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stopped properly
time
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from time
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 to time. .--
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