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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates the number of
foreigner
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foreigners
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 in areas like the coast, the
mountains
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, and the lakes of a European country from 1987 to 2007. The number of
people
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 visiting the coast and the
mountains
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 has increased over time,
while
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 the lakes experienced a drastic downfall in visitors after a certain period of years. In 1987, 20,000
people
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 were visiting the
mountains
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, and nearly 40,000
people
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 came to see the coasts. The ratio of
people
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 coming to enjoy the
mountains
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 is consistent throughout the years till 2007.
However
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, the coast experienced a downfall in tourists in the year 1992 but
then
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 saw a sharp increase till 2007. Meanwhile, the rise of
company
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the company
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 to the lakes started in 1992 and increased rapidly until 2002, when it experienced a dramatic downward trend, and the number of
foreigner
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foreigners
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 dropped from 75,000 to 50,000 in the span of just 05 years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words mountains, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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