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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below illustrates the comparison between different categories in 2015 and 2016 year. 
Overall
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, there have been several changes. The most noticeable is the slight growth of almost each
categories
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 export in 2016 by In 2015, it seems that the percentage of the most popular items
in
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 that time - petroleum products, was at the level of 60 per cent,
while
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 in the following
year
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 it reached almost 62, which became an absolute record all over the period. Engineered goods were
at
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the
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apply
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second place in 2015, and during the next
year
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 it
was
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increased
more
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 than 60 per cent. The number of agricultural and textiles items had less percentage: generally from 30 to 40 in both years.
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, the
amount
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 of exports showed an upward trend, especially textiles with
the
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 significant improvement of more than 3 per cent. The only exception was the gems and jewellery, which highlights a downward trend in 2016.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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