The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of UK citizens in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of 

UK citizens in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features 

and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided picture presents the cost in three categories among diverse age
people
of UK residents in 2004.
To begin
with, it is obvious that the demand for food and drinks gradually increases with
people
becoming older. Meanwhile, entertainment shows the same tendency as food, but the requirement of enjoyment drops
instead
of continuing to grow when citizens turn 76 plus years old.
Firstly
, the expense of food and drinks is as low as 6% in youngsters who are under 30 and it continuously increases to 23% in ageing
people
who are above 76.
Furthermore
, youngsters usually spend around 75 of the budget in playing and the statistic rockets to 23% after crowds turn 61 years old.
However
, probably owing to the inconvenient physical movements, the percentage drops to 13% when
people
are aged above 76.
In contrast
, the expenditure of restaurants and hotels fluctuates rather than steady growth. It starts at 14% in the young group and descends slowly to 2% in the group above 60 years old.
However
, it
finally
stops at 6% of the oldest citizens.
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