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In some countries, more are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #history #house #people #research
Nowadays, figuring out
about
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the
history
 of the place that each person is living in is an essential demand.
This
one
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can be
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by
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 many reasons,
such
 as the demand
of knowing
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 about the illegal facts,
the
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 mysterious stories of the
house
.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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those possible reasons and some
methods
people
 could use to access
further
information
 about their living place.
Firstly
,
people
 need to know about the
history
 of their
house
 in order to find out the illegal sides of it. In
details
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, the
house
 might be the collateral of the previous owner, or it can be the asset under dispute.
For example
, many investors recommend that it is
nessecary
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necessary
 to carefully
asked
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 about the dispute of the
house
 before paying for it in order not to be cheated.
Moreover
, many
people
 need to know about a
house
’s
history
 because they are aware of a haunted
house
.
People
 always avoid
to pay
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 for
house
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a house
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 or a building which has various haunting tales.
For instance
, Ho Chi Minh City citizens carefully find out about
variety
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 of haunting mysteries of
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 Kieu building, so they prefer not to invest
on
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 it. Moving on to some
methods
 that
people
 can use to search for
those
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essential
information
, there are three main types of
methods
 recommended. The first
one
 is asking the local government. The cadres at the local
People
’s
committee
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 can provide the official map of the
house
.
Due to
 that map,
people
 can know whether the
house
 has any parts that are built illegally. Another effective way is asking local
people
 and
neighbors
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. Those
people
 might know about some mysterious tales of the
house
such
 as the haunted stories
,
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and, private
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private
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 life of the previous owners. The next way which is not only effective but
also
 convenient is
that
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surfing the internet.
This
one
 is extremely
faster
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fast
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.
Moreover
, the range of
information
 that you can search is wide.
However
, the accuracy of
those
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information
 is doubtful. In conclusion, searching for the
history
 of the building is an essential demand of many
people
,
due to
 many reasons.
People
 can choose more than
one
 in various efficient
methods
 to have the
information
 they need.
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