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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.
#unemployment #rates #country #kingdom
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bar chart represents information about female workless rates in four countries of
United
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 Kingdom in two years.
Overall
, the maximum percentage in 2013 had country England, and in 2014 had
Scotland
,
however
, the minimum value in 2013 had
wales
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Wales
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, and in 2014
on
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its minimum position was Northern
Ireland
. It can be clearly seen that with nearly 7
percent
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 England was
leader
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 in
first
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 year, but in
second
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 year
on
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peak
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 was
Scotland
 with 6.7
percent
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.
On the other hand
, in 2013 Wales was
on
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 its minimum position with almost 5.5
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,
moreover
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in
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next
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 year
Nothern
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Northern
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Ireland
 fell from 5,6
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 to 4.6
percent
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,
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 and reached its minimum position. It is obvious that almost all countries declined, except
scotland
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, because
scotland
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 uplifted
for
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 0.6
percent
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.
Moreover
, the biggest fall with 1
percent
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 Northern
Ireland
. It is interesting to note that both Wales and
Nothern
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Ireland
 in
sum
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 of two years do not exceed
the
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10.5
percent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words scotland, ireland, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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