The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The given illustration represents information about five different sources of energy in France in 1995 and one decade later.
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, the most used energy production was coal in two periods of time ,
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all items had increased, except petro. It can be clearly seen that both gas and coal grew almost
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and kept all time the leadership position with approximately 30 per
cent
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for each other.
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, the percentage was not increased progressively , but it is in sum nearly 2 per
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. It is obvious that the smallest in percentage were energy production other and nuclear, but, both increased moderately, it is just below 2 times. It is interesting to note that the biggest fall
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Petro,
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declined from 29.27 per
cent
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to 19.55 per
cent
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.
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, it was in the middle of
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