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The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different veriables are measured in percentages

The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different veriables are measured in percentages
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The line graph shows the
birth
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rate
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,
population
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growth
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rate
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 and
death
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rate
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 from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different
veriables
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variables
 are measured in percentages. All three
veriables
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variables
 have declined from the start of the recording until the end of the recording.
This
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 we can see because the
birth
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rate
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 had shrunk from 2.5% to 0.5%,the
poplution
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population
pollution
growth
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rate
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 had declined from 0.9% to 0% and the
death
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rate
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 had decreased from 1.45% to 0.7%. The
birth
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rate
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 had the highest percentage change and in
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comparison
comperision
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 the
death
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rate
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 had the lowest percentage change.
In addition
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 to that the
birth
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rate
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 and
population
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growth
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rate
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, had increased and decreased in
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synchronisation
 from 1940 to 1989. Looking at the graph in more detail, you notice that the
death
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rate
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 had been under 0.5% from 1955 to 2017, but after 2017 it has risen to 0.7%. Between 1944 and 1945 both the
birth
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rate
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 and
population
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growth
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rate
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 had a positive correlation, but increased in
diffrent
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different
 amounts. The
growth
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rate
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 had risen by 0.9% and the
birth
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rate
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 had grown by 0.2%, meaning that the
birth
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rate
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 had changed at a lower
rate
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then
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 the
population
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growth
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rate
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, rate, population, growth, death with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • population growth rate
  • percentage
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • stabilize
  • demographic
  • interrelate
  • historical events
  • social policies
  • economic conditions
  • healthcare advancements
  • variable
  • measured
  • decade
  • significant
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