The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different veriables are measured in percentages

The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different veriables are measured in percentages
The line graph shows the
birth
rate
,
population
growth
rate
and
death
rate
from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different
veriables
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variables
are measured in percentages. All three
veriables
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variables
have declined from the start of the recording until the end of the recording.
This
we can see because the
birth
rate
had shrunk from 2.5% to 0.5%,the
poplution
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population
pollution
growth
rate
had declined from 0.9% to 0% and the
death
rate
had decreased from 1.45% to 0.7%. The
birth
rate
had the highest percentage change and in
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comparison
comperision
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,comperision
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the
death
rate
had the lowest percentage change.
In addition
to that the
birth
rate
and
population
growth
rate
, had increased and decreased in
sincrenisation
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synchronisation
from 1940 to 1989. Looking at the graph in more detail, you notice that the
death
rate
had been under 0.5% from 1955 to 2017, but after 2017 it has risen to 0.7%. Between 1944 and 1945 both the
birth
rate
and
population
growth
rate
had a positive correlation, but increased in
diffrent
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different
amounts. The
growth
rate
had risen by 0.9% and the
birth
rate
had grown by 0.2%, meaning that the
birth
rate
had changed at a lower
rate
then
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the
population
growth
rate
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, rate, population, growth, death with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • population growth rate
  • percentage
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • stabilize
  • demographic
  • interrelate
  • historical events
  • social policies
  • economic conditions
  • healthcare advancements
  • variable
  • measured
  • decade
  • significant
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