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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar,whichy cause many health problems.sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. do you agree or disagree?

#food #drink #products #levels #sugar #whichy #health #people
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food
 and
driking producted
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drinking products
 have
high
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a high
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level
 of
sugar
 . it may way
to
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too
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 many health problems.
sugar
producted
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products
made
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are made
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 more expensive to encourage
people
 to take
lwss
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less
sugar
. yes, I
completly
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completely
agree
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this
 issue because most of the
fod producteds
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food products
ae
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are
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 adding
high
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a high
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level
 of
suga
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sugar
 contents which
are
extremly
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extremely
harm
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harmful
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of
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 our body those
are
joing
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joining
 more
sugar
 which
give
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gives
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 more
delisious
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delicious
 and tasty. one
thirdy
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third
 of the
people
are affected
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have affected
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by this
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this
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this sugar problem
these sugar problems
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sugar
 problems
such
 as high
level
 of
sugar
 in their
blood
 and rising
blood
 pressure
level
 it may create heart
diassase
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disease
 like
heart
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a heart
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 attack. In
thish
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this
 area all
catagorey
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category
categories
 of
people
esspacically
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especially
 children
are
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like t
consuming
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consume
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 highly
sugarcontent
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sugar content
food
. these
are
 very
danger
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dangerous
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 in
chidren
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children
 life it
cause
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causes
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obsity
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obesity
 and
increasing
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increases
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blood
presure
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pressure
level
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levels
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 in their body .
Finally
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,Finally
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 they
effected
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affected
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 some
sevier desease
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severe diseases
 in childhood life. parent try to stop
blood
 high
level
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levels
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 of
sugar
 content
food
 to give their children, those
also
 stop
to eat
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eating
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 that type of
food
. Healthy
people
 encourage low
sugar
food
 these
type
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types
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 of events
are
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mostly help to
upcomming
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upcoming
 generation.
People
 try to
aviod
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avoid
 taking
heavly
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heavily
sugar added
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sugar-added
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food
.We must take healthy
food
such
 as fruits and
vegetable
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vegetables
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 those
are really help
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are really helping
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 to
increasing
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increase
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 our
life time
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lifetime
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 and we will live without disease.
Fastfood
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Fast food
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 have
highly
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high
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sugar
comparing
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compared
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 to
greenfood
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green food
greenwood
, so we should
completly
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completely
 avoid
to take
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taking
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fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
 and
junkfood
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junk food
 because those
are contain
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contain
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high
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a high
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level
 of
sugar
 content.Moat of
the
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apply
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people
are affect
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are affected
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sugar
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by sugar
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 disease and they
swallowing
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swallow
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 pills.In our
upcomming
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future
people
and
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apply
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we
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apply
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will not
take
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eat
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this
 kind of
food
 it will really help to decrease all
kind
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kinds
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 of
disease
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diseases
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 to live our feature healthy.
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