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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line chart demonstrates the mean of cost changes per
month
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 of
Copper
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, Nickel and zinc over a twelve-
month
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 period. As an overview, all three figures of described metals show fluctuating during 2014.
However
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, these three metals
price
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 changing averages experienced a downward trend over the first half of that year, and they showed an upward trend after that for the next 6 months. As it can be observed, at the beginning of the given time period,
Nickle
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 achieved the first rank with 6% in changing
price
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 among
Copper
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 and Zinc with 2% and 3% changing that
month
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 respectively.
However
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,
Copper
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 overtook
Nickle
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 with an increase of 1% in its
price
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 from the mentioned time to March.
In addition
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, both
Nickle
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 and
Copper
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 experienced a noticeable fall in
price
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 change with 1% and roughly 0.5% respectively that
month
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.
On the other hand
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,
Nickle
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's figure experienced its lowest percentage in June with -3%.
Also
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, meanwhile, both
Copper
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 and Zink
price
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 changes declined that
month
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 and
Copper
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 overtook
Nickle
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 with a -0.5% percentage change that
month
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.
Furthermore
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,
at the end
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 of the given time period, all of the three metals'
price
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 changes had increased significantly from June and their differences in percentage were negligible with 2% for Zinc, approximately 1.5% for
Copper
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 and 1% for
Nickle
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words month, copper, price, nickle with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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