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The table below shows information and prediction regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

The table below shows information and prediction regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.
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The table illustrates and forecasts information about the changes in volume of the older people at age 65 and older in 1988, 2000 and 2030 in three different countries, namely
Canada
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,
Germany
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 and the
UK
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.
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, we can see that the trend of the growth of old people was
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upward and it will continue until.
Germany
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 has the highest rank,
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 the
UK
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 has the third rank. In 1988, the population of old people in
Germany
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 was about one-fifth,
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 the percentage
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Canada
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 and the
UK
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 was about 16% and 14% respectively. After 12 years, in 2000,
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 the proportion of older individuals rose by 1% in the
UK
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, the percentage in
Canada
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 and
Germany
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 increased by 5%, and reached 21% and 25% respectively. It is predicted that after 30 years, in 2030, the population aged 65 and above in three countries will rise by about 5%. But the situation of all countries will not change in the table.
Germany
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 with 30%,
Canada
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 with 26% and the
UK
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 with 20% will have the
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second and third rank.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, germany, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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