In future more people will choose to go to holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holidays. Do you agree or disagree?

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was very funny. The first days of the

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were exams.

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I relaxed in the village in the clean air and it was cooler than the city. And the view of nature is simply beautiful. Later I left for Tashkent. We relaxed there for a

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. There

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almost all the

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entertainment

parks in Tashkent. I especially liked that day, when we went to the zoo and water park. The most wonderful

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was when I tried almost all types of fast food and sushi. And on the

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days of the

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holiday

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we relaxed in the summer

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cottage

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this

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rest I got sick. I had a wonderful

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and a good summer

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

122 words

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In future more people will choose to go to holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holidays. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many parents choose to teach their children at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the benefits of homeschooling outweigh its drawbacks?

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Today more and more tourist are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. To what extent to you agree or disagree?