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In many country schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays, all over the world, the topic of
students
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behaviour
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 at
school
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 is omnipresent.
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 some people think that the cause of several problems with
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 at
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 exists, other people propose solutions. I think both perspectives are valid for the reasons discussed below.
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 with, as far as the cause of severe problems with student's
behaviour
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 at
school
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 is concerned, to a large extent, especially in modern times, no matter where in the world you live, the comportment of children become critical
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 the fact that parents become too soft, leading to being less strict with children.
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, if you compare with the 1950s, when a kid made a big fault, most of the time he was punished with a slap, in
this
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 modern society, you cannot do it and just need to talk with him.
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, and most importantly, social media can have a bad impact on
students
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 owing to being disconnected from reality, they want to do whatever they see on their screens, resulting in making stupid ideas.
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, there are solutions to reduce
students
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'
behaviour
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. First and foremost, by and large, in both developed and developing countries, teachers could increase punishment, in order to be respectful and not beat children.
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, when teenagers make fault at
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, the teacher could ask
students
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 to stay after
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 and do homework.
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, at least to some degree,
students
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 can be followed by a specialist, or put in a special
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 where learn respect,
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 as a Catholic
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 or the army. In conclusion,
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students
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behaviour
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 increased in
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 these recent years,
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 essay suggests some solutions to reduce problems of
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behaviour
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However
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, In my opinion, both perspectives have value for the above-mentioned reasons
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