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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

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There are many ideas for what is the main
environment
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problem
 of our time. Some
people
 say that the main environmental
problem
 of airtime is the moss of particular species of
plants
 and
animals
.
While
 others believe that there are more important environmental
problems
. On the one hand,
people
 believe that the disappearance of some specific
plants
 and
animals
 may lead
the
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 main
problem
 of our environment.
Plants
 can usually produce oxygen and absorb
the
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greenhouse gases during their breathing.
Therefore
, if there are less plant species exist, air pollution may become more serious without help from
plants
.
Also
, the world needs
animals
. Some kinds of herbivores may help
people
 to wipe out the pests when they are eating.
Therefore
, they are
the
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important characters to protect
plants
 and grass.
On the other hand
, others think that there are more environmental
problems
 more important than the ideas from the above. Car emissions and industrial gases can produce carbon monoxide, which can both
cause
 air pollution and health damage. Deforestation
from
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humans
 brings air pollution
due to
 no
plants’
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plant’
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 activities. In that case, not just the extinction of
animals
 and
plants
cause
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causes
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 important environmental
problems
 but others
seems
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seem
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 to be more important
cause
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caused
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 by
humans
. In my opinion, I agree with the
last
 group. The serious environmental
problem
 not mainly
cause
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caused
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 by the disappearance of
animals
 and
plants
, but
more
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is more
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 likely
lead
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led
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to
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the
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human factors. From the above example, I clearly mentioned three main causes which they all
produce
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 by
humans
. In conclusion,
however
, many
people
 think when
animals
 or
plants
died
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die
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, they will lead to a serious
problem
of
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in
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environment
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the environment
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. I still agree with the second group of
people
 that other
problems
produce
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produced
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 by
humans
 could lead
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to a
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a
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an
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 ever worse
problem
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
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  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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