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Some people believe that schools should reward those students who show excellent academic performance while some believe that only the ones who show significant improvement in the grades should be rewarded. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #schools #reward #students #show #performance #believe #ones #improvement #grades
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wthether
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whether
 rewards should be given to
students
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academic
 performers or those who
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 significant improvement in
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 grades. Prior to giving any opinion, I shall be expatiating both the point of
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 in the upcoming paragraphs. The part of society who are of the opinion that the pupils showing the differentiating results would be awarded for their efforts have their own
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.
Firstly
, rewards to toppers will motivate the other children to
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efforts
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 and score well in their studies. Because reward is one of the biggest motivating
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 for every individual. When the prices are given to
students
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their exams it will create a sense of achievement for those who received the awards and
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, it will
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healthy competition between
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 of the class to work hard
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 that
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prize
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On the other hand
, the ones who are of the thought that the
students
 who are improving in their grades should be rewarded have their own reasons. The main reason is that
while
 awarding on the small
acheivements
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achievements
 helps them to show the excellent results in future. Another reason is that there can be always one topper and
therefore
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 the ones who
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motivating
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 to do better.
To conclude
, people's
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opinions
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small rewards should be given to those who are improving in their scores.
This
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 the brighter
students
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,
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it
also
 helps to push the
students
 who are average at their studies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic performance
  • excellent academic performance
  • significant improvement
  • motivates
  • aspires
  • intelligence
  • hard work
  • dedication
  • competitive spirit
  • academic success
  • struggle academically
  • perseverance
  • innate ability
  • confidence
  • valued
  • growth mindset
  • inclusive environment
  • holistic education
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