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Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #ebooks #technology #newspaper #magazines
Newspaper is the only method to convey any type of
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news to the
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future
 it
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 totally replaced by
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modern technology. In my opinion,I strongly agree with the statement
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 traditional approach will be totally replaced by the
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future
innovation
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.
However
, some
people
 still like to follow the old method itself. Most of the individuals in
this
 new generation are always
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 interest in the things which are
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. So, buying newspapers and
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magazines
 which
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costs
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 them more. Because
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 all the content is available
in
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 the internet. We are living in
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 world
were
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where
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 new innovations are making
peoples
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people's
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 life easier without any type of
stresss
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stress
 and
hardwork
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hard work
. In
todays
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 generation
people
 are more attracted to the digital screen
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where
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 they can find
out
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answers
for
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the
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most of their questions. we can see there are new AI tools and bots
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 helping
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people
 to summarize the
contant
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content
 which are present in the articles which makes
time
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Everyday
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 we
are using
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 online chat applications like
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,facebook,
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whatsapp
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Whatsapp
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 we are getting updated
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 the situation
by
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time
 to
time
with
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this
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 applications. With
this
 many persons are able to save
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time
 and invest it in other works. Many seniors said that updating old practice methods with new ones will make future generations lazy. They
also
 thought that reading practice
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 help
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mankind to reduce their mistakes and be able to grasp the content very easily. By reading Ebooks it
also
 leads to many eye diseases. Because we are looking at a computer screen for long hours. They
also
 state a quote that "Traditional method is our roots,which we should not leave".
To conclude
, updating from old methods to new modern methods will make
people
's life more easier which is
time
 and cost-effective. In the future many papers will be updated to PDF with some content.
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