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Nowadays, many students live with their families while others go to another city to study at a university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#students #families #city #study #university
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 modern era pupils live with their families
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 cities to pursue their education at a university there are both advantages and disadvantages which
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 my upcoming paragraph. Living with family has both merits and demerits.
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, spending time with family
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 can help to understand each other.
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, living together in a family can
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 the privacy of a person a person can feel unsafe if his or her privacy is invaded. Moving
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, the student who live
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 city for their education purposes can feel more confident and feel self dependent they
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 for their work they are more responsible.
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 living without family can make them feel lonely and they
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 with them to share their problem. In conclusion,
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 living with family and living alone both have
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 and demerits
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 between family
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 and living alone can make them more confident.
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