laast month you had holiday and you stayed with some friends .Thet hacve sent you somr of photros of the holiday.write a letter to your frirnds

#laast #month #holiday #friends #hacve #somr #photros #frirnds

Dear

achu

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ache

kichu

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kitchen

How have you been

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I was so busy after our tour.,First I thank you for sending our photos.All the photos are gorgeous especially you.My most memorable event was swimming.I had no idea about swimming.but you thought of me. I thank you . I could not more time in my office .sorry for my late reply.you know

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am a new employee in my office.so I have a lot of work.

evenif

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even if

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do not use social media.

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could not open my WhatsApp for 2 days. I opened our photo yesterday. If you visit India you must come to my home.

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am very excited to see you.My parents

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told me about you.When you come to my home we will visit our nearby botanical garden.It is a very fabulous place. . Hope to see you soon Lovingly yours Hasna

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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1Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Grammar mistakes
 

9 paragraphs

139 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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laast month you had holiday and you stayed with some friends .Thet hacve sent you somr of photros of the holiday.write a letter to your frirnds

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

In today's world many people own a smartphone. Do you think the advantages of owing a smartphone outweigh the disadvantages?

Some parents think children's behavior should be strictly controlled, while other parents think children should be free to behave. Discuss both views and give examples.

Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However,other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people are in the world. Others feel that these organisations should only serve the people living in the country where they are based. Discuss both sides and give your own view.

With the rapid development of communication technology, e.g smart phones, tablets and other communication devices, some people believe that the disadvantages of these devices outweigh their advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?