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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. The number of people with different

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There is a line graph to illustrate the changes that
people
’s working time from 1998 to 2004. And the table displays the
number
 of holidays by
years
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year
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 from 1998 to 2004. In summary,
for
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from
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 the line chart diagram,
it is clear that
 the
number
 of
people
 who
work
 16-31
hours
 and 32-45
hours
 showed
a
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an
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 upward trend from 1998 to 2004.
In addition
, the
number
 of
people
 who
work
 over 45
hours
 showed a downward trend in the same period. To the details, for the line graph, it is obvious that the
number
 of
people
 who
work
 16-31
hours
less
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is less
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 than the
number
 of
people
 who
work
 32-45
hours
 in 1998, about 0.5
millions
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million
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people
.
Additionally
, as can be seen
that
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the
number
 of
people
 who
work
 16-31
hours
 and 31-45
hours
 are same in 1999, about 10.5
millions
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million
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people
. It could be noticed that the
number
 of
people
 who
work
 16-31
hours
 increased slightly from 1998 to 2004, and reached a peak of 11.2
millions
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million
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people
 in 2004. it is worth noticing that the
number
 of
people
 who
work
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worked
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 32-45
hours
 less than
people
 who
work
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worked
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 16-31
hours
 in 2004,
about
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was about
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 0.8
millions
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million
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. And it is interesting to note that the
number
 of
people
 who
work
 over 45
hours
had
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has
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 steadily fluctuation.
For
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From
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 the table, we can see that the
number
 of holidays showed
a
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an
show examples
 upward trend from 1998. in conclusion, it is clear from the
date
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data
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that the
number
 of
people
 who
work
 16-31
hours
 and 32-45
hours
 climbed slowly from 1998 to 2004. And the
number
 of
people
 who
work
 over 45
hours
had
Wrong verb form
has
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 rapid change.
Moreover
,
according to
 the table, the
number
 of holidays went up
mildly
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slightly
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from 1998.
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