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Due to globalization, many countries lose their traditions and national values. Some people think it is the responsibility of governments to protect these values. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, nations have more tendency towards globalization and
this
 leading to the loss of traditions and national
values
 in some countries.
According to
 some people's beliefs,
governments
 are in charge of protecting these
values
. In my humble opinion,
governments
 play a crucial role in preserving national noteworthies, but it is not enough, and the public should contribute too.
Due to
 the authority that
governments
 have, they are able to preserve the
values
 of a nation. it is undeniable that they have a profound impact on a major proportion of their nations' points of view by some activities.
firstly
, they can hold festivals related to
such
values
. Holding a festival with some cuisines and traditional customs,
for instance
, draw children's attention towards that and
as a result
,these
values
 penetrate through their soul and mind.
In addition
,
governments
 could create films, animations, or short clips in favour of their country to inform people around the world about our cultures and
values
.
On the other hand
, the people of a country should contribute to saving their
values
 and distinguish what they come to their lives because of globalization, and what they have acquired from their own roots and privilege them. Social media,
for instance
, is an accessible way to propagate thoughts and
values
 among society and raise awareness of the youth.
This
 not only helps our nation to save our
values
 but
also
 makes the world familiar with our intrinsic culture and traditions. In conclusion,
governments
 play a key role in protecting the
values
 of a society by means of ceremonies and multimedia.
However
, the nation itself can protect these
values
 too. I believe the responsibility for saving our
values
 is upon both
governments
 and society.
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