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The table below shows the estimated literacy rates by region and gender for 2000-2004.

The table below shows the estimated literacy rates by region and gender for 2000-2004.
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The table compares the portion of people who are literate across different continents and genders over a
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 period. We can see that
europe
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 has the highest rate of
literated
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literate
 people
while
africa
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Africa
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 accounts for the least amount of
literated
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literate
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 population speaking in relative terms.
Also
, women
educated
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 less than
men
 across all of the five continents. Considering
total
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 population of the regions, the
europeans
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Europeans
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 who
recieved
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received
 an
education
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 up almost 90
per-cent
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 of the population.
Furthermore
, folk in
ocenia
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Oceania
oceanic
 and
americas
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America
 were closely tied up at the second place with roughly 93.5
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 of their society knowing how to read and write.
On the other hand
,
asians
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 and
africans
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Africans
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 had more illiterate people and were
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worldwite
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worldwide
 literacy
rate
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with
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 79.3 and 62.5
per-cent
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 respectively.
While
 more
men
 than women got
education
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 everywhere, the difference between their rates
were
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 as little as below 1
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per cent
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 in
europe
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Europe
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 and
americas
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America
 and
similarly
, 1.5
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per cent
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 in
oceanina
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Oceania
.
However
, almost 86
per-cent
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 of
asian
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Asian
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men
recieved
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received
receive
 an
education
while
 females'
education
 rate was 13.5
per-cent
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per cent
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 less.
Moreover
,
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 for educated
african
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African
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 females was as low as below 54
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while
 almost 72
per-cent
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per cent
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 of
men
 knew how to read and write at the time.
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