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Some people think that charity organizations should only offer help to people of their own country. But others believe that these organizations should give aid to people in great need wherever they live. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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To have enough to share; to know the joy of giving; to thrill with all the sweets of life - is living. Helping others is a very virtuous thing. Charities help in basically two ways. One is by offering support to
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 remain directly in touch with the needy. They can see how the money or other other resources provided by them are being used. It has been well said that
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 begins at home. What is more, domestic charities target problems specific to their home
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Help Age India is an Indian
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 providing help for the aged in India. There are
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 many advantages if these
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 help the needy in any corner of the world. In
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 work on a larger platform and provide help for global issues. A larger platform is a must if one has a lot to offer in
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. Help activities can be better spread through a larger network. Help need not be always in the form of money. It can be in the form of services
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 can provide doctors and teachers who volunteer to provide medical aid and
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 teach in underdeveloped nations. Help in any form is good. The condition of one‘s
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 could influence the way of helping. In a developed
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, where even the poorest of the poor have the basic amenities of life, it would be better to help in any part of the world where
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 need help. But, in the case of a developing or underdeveloped ,
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 it would be better to help those around you. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that the purpose of
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure your introduction clearly presents the topic and your position on it.
task achievement
Your essay provides a comprehensive response to the task, but make sure to address both views in equal depth.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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