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The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast food. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shows below.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast food. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shows below.
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The bar chart compares three different
class
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classes
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 of
income's
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income
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spendings
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spent
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 on fast food per week in the year
of
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apply
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1990 in the UK and the line graph illustrates the amount of consumption of
hamburgers
,
fish
 &
chips
 and
pizza
 over a
20 years
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20-year
 period. Despite the fact that the people in high
income
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low-income
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 category spent the most on
hamburgers
 and
pizza
,
fish
 &
chips
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and chips
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was
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were
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 more popular
between
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among
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 folk in the middle class.
Also
, unlike the rise in the consumption of
hamburgers
 and
fish
 &
chips
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and chips
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over
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apply
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,
pizza
's take-in was reduced between 1970 and 1985. Looking at the bar chart, we can see that
middle-income
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the middle-income
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 class of the society spent 25 million pounds on
fish
 &
chips
while
 the other two groups spent a little over 15 million.
Also
,
fish
 &
chips
was
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were
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 the favourite fast food of the
low budget
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low-budget
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 folk
while
on the other hand
,
two
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the two
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 upper classes
prefered
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preferred
hamburgers
 more.
Moreover
, as we move towards the groups of higher income, expenditure on pizzas
increase
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increases
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; to be
percise
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precise
, each group spent about 7, 12 and 18 million pounds on pizzas respectively. Considering the line graph,
pizza
's consumption was at its highest in 1970 with 300 grams per week
while
 people consumed little under 100 grams and just about 30 grams of
fish
 &
chips
 and
hamburgers
, respectively.
Pizzas'
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Pizzas
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 take-in declined
while
 the other two fast foods gained more popularity until 1982 when
fish
 &
chips
 popularity took over the
pizza's
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pizzas
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.
Furthermore
,
although
pizza
 began to attract more people in 1985 again, the amount of eaten
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 surpassed that of
pizza's
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pizzas
pizza
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 in 1986.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburgers, fish, chips, pizza with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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