The chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
The display chart provides information on the
expenditure
of two countries
France
as well as
UK
on consumer goods in 2010. It is given in
pound
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pounds
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sterling. The chart shows the
expenditure
on
cars
, computers, books, perfume and cameras. In
France
,
in
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cars
expenditure
is 400000,
in
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computers
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it is nearly 380000,
in
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books it is 300000, in perfume it is 200000 and
in
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cameras
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it is 150000. In the
UK
, in
cars
there is 450000, in
computers
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there is 350000, in
books
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there is more than 400000, in
perfume
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there is around 150000 and in
cameras
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it is more than 35000. The data is given in pounds sterling.
There
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is
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great
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different
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in
camreas
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cameras
in both
nation
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. The information is about the year 2010. The
expenditur
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expenditure
expenditures
on every
things
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are different.
To conclude
, the highest in
France
was
on
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cars
and in the
UK
it was
also
on
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cars
. The above data describes the
expenditure
of the two nations they are
France
and
UK
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the UK
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, france, uk, cars with synonyms.
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