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The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the given line graph depicts information about the temperatures of three major cities at different months of the year.
To begin
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 with, it is quite evident from the line graph, that the
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temprature
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temperature
 in Paris and Dubai is 5
degree
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degrees
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celsius
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Celsius
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 and 18
degree
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degrees
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celsius
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Celsius
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 in the
month
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 of January respectively.
Then
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 it shows a gradual increase in
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temprature
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temperature up to
upto
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 the
month
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 of July in these cities and reaches
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upto
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up to
 20 and 35 respectively. Later on, a slight increase in
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temprature
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temperature
temperatures
 in Dubai can be seen between July to August but
Paris
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Paris's
Pari's
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temprature
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temperature
 remains levelled off. After that, there is a gradual decrease which is clearly seen
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upto
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up to
 December for both of these cities.
On the other hand
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,
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the temprature
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temprature
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temperature
temperatures
 in Sydney is around 24 degrees
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celsius
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Celsius
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 in the
month
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 of January and
then
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 it decreases moderately and reaches
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upto
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up to
 13 degrees
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celsius
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 in the
month
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 of July. After that, it increases again gradually and reaches
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upto 23-degree
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up to 23 degrees
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celsius
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Celsius
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.
overall
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,
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the temprature
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temprature
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temperature
 of Paris and Dubai shows the same trend in the given time period but Sydney is the converse of it.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words temprature, celsius, month, upto with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperature
  • major cities
  • trends
  • temperature changes
  • comparisons
  • yearly pattern
  • geographical location
  • climate zones
  • significant variations
  • notable differences
  • peak temperatures
  • lowest temperatures
  • fluctuations
  • seasonal changes
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