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The 3 pie charts illustrate the rate of 4 types of transport are driven in the United Kingdom in 1996, 1985 and 2005.

The 3 pie charts illustrate the rate of 4 types of transport are driven in the United Kingdom in 1996, 1985 and 2005.
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The given pie charts illustrate the 4 different transportation types (private
cars
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, public transport, lorries and other commercial
vehicles
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 and recreational
vehicles
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) in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Private
cars
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 showed a continuous increase over the period. In 1965, Private
cars
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 had the highest proportion of the transportation method which was 40%
while
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 recreational
vehicles
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 had the lowest proportion of 15%. In 1995, the exact
quater
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quarter
 belonged to public transport and 20% accounted for lorries and other commercial
vehicles
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. In 1985 and 2005, private
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cars
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car
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 usage increased
more
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 than half of the total usage, which was 55% and 60% respectively. Public transportation had
ncrease
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increased
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2
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% in 2005 compared to 1985, It was 20 % and 22%. Recreational
vehicles
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 showed the lowest percentage in 1985 and 2005, which was less than 10%
both
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in both
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 periods. lories and other
comercial
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commercial
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vehicles
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vehicle
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decrease
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decreased
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 in 2005 (10%) when compared to 1985 (20%). Public transport fluctuated around 20%-25% over
this
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 period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, vehicles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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