The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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The given table represents information about six different towns with a number of visitors and where they opened between 1863 and 2001 years.
Overall
, in half of the places the number of passengers
was quite good ,however
in others the number did not exceed 150 million
.
It can be clearly seen that the megapolis London which opened in 1863 had the highest kilometres
of route
, it is 394 with 774 million
passengers
. Whereas
, the metropolis Kyoto which realised in 1981 had the lowest kilometres
of route
, furthermore
the minimum quantity of humans, which was 45 million
.
It could be noticed that the two cities Kyoto and Los Angeles in kilometres
of the route
did not reach 30 in each other ,moreover
both in sum did not exceed in numbers of Add a comma
,moreover
passengers
100 million
.
In the year ,1900 Paris and 1927 Tokyo also
saw that both cities had the biggest quantity of people in sum just over 3000 million
people.
It is interesting to note that Washington DC which was realised in 1976 year had a medium quantity of passengers
and kilometres
of route
, which was 126 km and 144 million
humanity.Submitted by dimash171206 on
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