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The diagrma shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.

The diagrma shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.
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The diagram illustrates the process of how rainwater is being used for drinking
purpose
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purposes
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 in an Australian town.
The rain
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Rain
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water
 is
source
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the source
a source
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 of clean
water
 which after a simple process of cleaning and chemical treatment can be provided to
a
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consumers.
This
 process is beneficial since it is low cost and helps to reduce the usage of drinking
water
reservuares
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reservoirs
reserves
. The cycle of
rianwater
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rainwater
 usage starts with
water
 collectors
bulit
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built
 on the roof of each house. Collected rainwater, through a drain pipe, falls from the roof downwards to
underground
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the underground
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 collector, passes through a
water
 filter, where all
debries
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debris
are being
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is
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 removed
,
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 and goes to a storage tank.
Next
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The next
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 stage is
water
 chemical treatment:
water
 from the storage tank is pumped to the tank with
built
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a built
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 chemical
dosator
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doctor
. Chemicals are required
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addjust
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adjust
content
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the content
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 of
minarels
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minerals
 to the necessary level. Afterwards,
water
 which is safe for drinking is delivered to the houses.
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