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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that learning new
languages
 is important for just travelling and work
purposes
 but other people think
in contrast
 and say that learning new
languages
 is useful for more other than
two
 mentioning goals like education, culture and communication in the following statements will be shown each point of view
also
 essay's author opinion. The mentioned topic's believers' point of view is kind economical, and useful but harsh . It is true that one of the most important
reasons
 for learning new
languages
 are working and travelling
purposes
 and probably the shiniest
ones
 because the impact of tow mentioned
reasons
 is quick, and time-based, so people think these
two
 are the only important
ones
 and its example is modern
countries
 like china and USA and their connection. Because of their strong monetary relationship, every businessman in each country wants to learn the other side's
languages
.
On the other hand
 history and science have proven to us that
languages
 are useful for plenty of important
reasons
 like education, cultural matters, and communication.
For instance
, if no one wants to learn a new language rather than working and travelling, Communication between new
countries
 with different language routes has been an impossible thing.
Therefore
 other
purposes
 of learning new
languages
 are as important as the
two
 mentioned in topics
reasons
. In conclusion and in my opinion
languages
 and learning new
ones
 have dozens of impacts on daily life and there are plenty of important
reasons
 for learning new
languages
 which using new
ones
 for working abroad
also
 travelling to mentioned
countries
 are the most glorious
purposes
 but education and learning about other cultural matters for other
countries
 have the same impact rather than working and travelling so there are different goals for learning new
languages
 and mentioning just
two
reasons
 is not a perfect point of view.
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coherence and cohesion
The essay addresses both views and gives a clear opinion at the end. The introduction and conclusion are present and well-structured, supporting the overall coherence of the essay.
task achievement
The essay responds to the task by discussing both views and giving a clear opinion. The ideas are generally clear and comprehensive, but could benefit from more specific and relevant examples to support the arguments.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
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