The graph below shows levels of online shopping by age group for different times of the day. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows levels of online shopping by age group for different times of the day. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the proportion of
sales
when people went shopping online during a day in 2015, split by
age
.
Overall
, people who are from 25 to 34 years old are the
group
with the strongest increase and have the highest level of
sales
in online shopping,
while
elderly people’s figure was the lowest. As seen in the given chart, before 9 a.
m
., all
age
groups
witnessed the lowest level of
sales
at approximately 5%.
However
, the next three hours saw a significant increase in the percentage of people from different
age
groups
and the over-60
group
bought the most with nearly 20 per cent of
sales
. In the afternoon (from 12
p
.
m
. to 6
p
.
m
.), the proportion of
sales
for the youngest
group
overtook the rest by a climb to 27% at 4-6
p
.
m
., followed by that of 25-34 and 45-59
age
groups
, at 22 and 18 respectively. From
this
time to before 8
p
.
m
., there was a steep growth in the percentage of
sales
of the young adult
group
and reached its peak at 33%, followed by 31% of 35 to 44-year-olds, 28% of the youngest
group
, 22% of the middle-aged
group
,
while
the figure for the elderly who are aged 60 and over decreased significantly to just under 10%. After 8p.
m
to 9 a.
m
the next morning, the figures for
sales
for all
age
groups
dropped.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, age, group, m, groups, p with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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