The diagram below describes the stages in the process of making canned and bottled carbonated drinks.

The diagram below describes the stages in the process of making canned and bottled carbonated drinks.
The diagram illustrates the steps involved in canned and bottled carbonated drinks production. There are 5 stages, from the cleaning step to the packaging one. The first stage is
that
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when
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the raw
water
is transferred to the filter, where it is cleaned and softened.
Next,
water
 is united with chemicals and goes through the pump.
Then
, electric heaters
sends
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water
through the cooling pipe into the big machine. Having been left in the equipment with carbon dioxide,
water
is evaporated and carbonated as well. In order to provide certain characteristics to the liquid, carbonated
water
is delivered to the mixing tank. Here we can add colour, syrup or flavour.
Consequently
, it is filtered again and faces
with
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the fourth step, where cans or bottles are filled with
this
consistency. The final product is wrapped into the boxes, and
then
, transported to the supermarkets. At
this
stage, the
water
is ready to drink.
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