Some people say free time activities for children should be organized by parents. Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion. You should write at least 250 words.

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time activities of their

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that they have to choose what they want to do. I personally think that it is far beneficial letting them choose their favourite

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their character and

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have a tendency to decide something even follow their

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before they start to decide something by their ownself.

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, in order to develop their character and cognitive skill, trusting youngsters one hundred

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they can learn how to make

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, they choose to play soccer after finishing their assignment and parents are better

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allowing them to do so

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since they already know what is better and

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them.

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beneficial

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impact both in

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physical

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as they learn how to encourage each other as a team.

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in my perspective, when

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they make a decision and as they

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older they become more wise, responsible and able to choose wisely. To

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children

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are still under

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guidance, letting them choose their favourite activities

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myriad

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benefits in

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when they grow up it can be

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a base character, personality and habits in a good way.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

315 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

balanced development
expose children to
tailored activities
promote discipline
foster independence
genuine interests
free play
problem-solving skills
emotional well-being
unstructured time
personal exploration
structured activities

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