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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given
tabel
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table
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provides
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provide
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provides
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 information
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on
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of
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on
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 annual milk
production
 in
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the Netherlands
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, Australia, Tanzania and
Guatema
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Guatemala
 between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, the
number
 of
production
 of all four countries
increase
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increased
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 during the
periode
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period
 and Guatemala was
depict
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depicted
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 the least.
According to
 the data, in 1990 Australia
leads
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led
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 the
number
 of
production
 by 11,246,000 litres, followed by
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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.
However
 in in the next ten years, the
number
fallen
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fell
has fallen
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 and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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produce
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produced
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much
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a much
the much
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 higher
number
 in litres continue to 2010
which
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apply
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about 11,466.000 every year.
On the other hand
,
Tanzania
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Tanzania's
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 yearly milk
production
 was counted by 87.000 in 1990 and kept
increase
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increasing
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 to 1,55.000 in the next 20 years. Meanwhile, Guatemala stayed
at
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as
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last
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the last
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 country with
smallest
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the smallest
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number
 of
production
 every year,
whereas
 the
number
 was half of
the
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apply
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Tanzania. In 1990,
production
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the production
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number
 was counted by 26,000 and
then
 rose a half and in 2010 they
produce
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produced
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 84,000 litres of milk
i
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apply
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a year.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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